Humanity+Paragraph

  ** __ Humanity Paragraph: __ ** // Nava Friedmann // // Block 4, Grade 9 English Challenge // There are lots of aspects to humanity, but one in particular for me stands out: Th e fact that humans are always striving for the bett er: to use science and technology and advance ourselves. In all that we have done and created, enough is never enough, we are still always contemplating new ideas and making new creations, but why? That is simply because it is part of what makes up humans. Chris Abani tells a story of the Igbo, ad how they used to build their own Gods, worship them and make sacrifices to them. However, if the God became too cocky, and demanded human sacrifices, they would destroy the God and forget His name. This is a great example that shows how new a idea or new technology can be all the rage one day, but be forgotten the next. As a modern day example; does anyone know what a “walkman” is? I had to ask my dad before I figured out it was a portable tape player. Nowadays, we use iPods, MP3s and other technology to play music while walking. Humans are constantly on the move with technology and new ideas. It is part of who and what we are. We will always be pushing for better and leaving our other “amazing” creations and ideas in the dust: That is just part of humanity.     References: -My Dad -http://www.ted.com/talks/chris_abani_muses_on_humanity.html -Peer editors -http://thesaurus.com  || ||
 * |||| || || || ===6+1 Trait Writing Model : discussion and blog rubric===

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 * CATEGORY || 2 || 1.5 || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 11pt;">1 || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 11pt;">0 ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 11pt;">Introduction (Organization) || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;"> The introduction is inviting, states the main topic and previews the structure of the discussion/blog. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">The introduction clearly states the main topic and previews the structure of the discussion/blog, but is not particularly inviting to the reader. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">The introduction states the main topic, but does not adequately preview the structure of the discussion/blog nor is it particularly inviting to the reader. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">There is no clear introduction of the main topic or structure of the discussion/blog. ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 11pt;">Word Choice || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;"> Writer uses vivid words and phrases that linger or draw pictures in the reader's mind, and the choice and placement of the words seems accurate, natural and not forced. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Writer uses vivid words and phrases that linger or draw pictures in the reader's mind, but occasionally the words are used inaccurately or seem overdone. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Writer uses words that communicate clearly, but the writing lacks variety, punch or flair. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Writer uses a limited vocabulary that does not communicate strongly or capture the reader's interest. Jargon or cliches may be present and detract from the meaning. ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 11pt;">Accuracy of Facts (Content) || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">All supportive facts are reported accurately. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;"> Almost all supportive facts are reported accurately. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Most supportive facts are reported accurately. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">NO facts are reported OR most are inaccurately reported. ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 11pt;">Sources (Content) || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;"> All sources used for quotes and facts are credible and cited correctly. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">All sources used for quotes and facts are credible and most are cited correctly. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Most sources used for quotes and facts are credible and cited correctly. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Many sources used for quotes and facts are less than credible (suspect) and/or are not cited correctly. ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 11pt;">Grammar & Spelling (Conventions) || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Writer makes no errors in grammar or spelling that distract the reader from the content. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;"> Writer makes 1-2 errors in grammar or spelling that distract the reader from the content. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Writer makes 3-4 errors in grammar or spelling that distract the reader from the content. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Writer makes more than 4 errors in grammar or spelling that distract the reader from the content. ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 11pt;">Focus on Topic (Content) || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">T here is one clear, well-focused topic. Main idea stands out and is supported by detailed information. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Main idea is clear but the supporting information is general. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Main idea is somewhat clear but there is a need for more supporting information. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">The main idea is not clear. There is a seemingly random collection of information. ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 11pt;">Sentence Length (Sentence Fluency) || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;"> Every paragraph has sentences that vary in length. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Almost all paragraphs have sentences that vary in length. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Some sentences vary in length. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Sentences rarely vary in length. ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 11pt;">Transitions (Organization) || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;"> A variety of thoughtful transitions are used. They clearly show how ideas are connected. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Transitions clearly show how ideas are connected, but there is little variety. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">Some transitions work well; but connections between other ideas are fuzzy. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">The transitions between ideas are unclear or nonexistant. ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 11pt;">Conclusion (Organization) || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;"> The conclusion is strong and leaves the reader with a feeling that they understand what the writer is "getting at." || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">The conclusion is recognizable and ties up almost all the loose ends. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">The conclusion is recognizable, but does not tie up several loose ends. || <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: arial,verdana,tahoma; font-size: 9pt;">There is no clear conclusion, the discussion/blog just ends. || || || ||